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Prophets 'Honesty'and'Reality'

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You told me how you loved the rain
So now my world's flooded with pain.
I must have been insane
For me to believe, you loved me once again.

I waited on your doorstep
You told me no one else was a threat.
And I listened, although not one of your promises has been kept.
Trading a piece of my heart at a time, until there was nothing left.

Raindrops start to fall again on my face.
Reality slaps me back in my place,
When you easily find a way to replace.
All this time spent with you, turned out to be a waste.

It's like watching storm clouds gather, watching the truth unfold.
Why was I the last one to be told?
You fed me your lies, and I was easily sold.
How is it all the prophets saw, yet never foretold?

I only asked for Honesty, and still you chose to lie.
Maybe it's entertaining for you to watch me die.
You only wanted one thing from me, something deep inside.
So you bit my neck, drinking blood, sucking me dry.

You don't understand the meaning of Honesty;
Or maybe you just don't choose to see.
Maybe you don't recognize Reality:
I hate you as much as you hate me.
the title is actually supposed to be, "The Propets 'Honesty' and 'Reality' " but some of it didn't fit.

i wrote this during science class today, well at least until Mr. D started reading off of my textbook i was using for a clipboard. then i actually started taking notes on lightning.

which might explain the rain/storm lines i put in here.
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AellaWind's avatar
constructive critisism... don't really have too much

You told me how you loved the rain
So now my world's flooded with pain.
I must have been insane
For me to believe, you loved me once again.


I don't understand how the fact that this person loving the rain has anything to do with your world being flooded with pain. Also the flow in the last two lines isn't perfect but I understand that it's really hard to make poems flow perfectly, so I think that's just fine.

Raindrops start to fall again on my face.
Reality slaps me back in my place,
When you easily find a way to replace.
All this time spent with you, turned out to be a waste.


I don't know whether it's misplaced punctuation or not, but I didn't really understand the last two lines in that stanza... well i understand the last line, the third I didn't.

The rest of the poem is good the way it is... not too much contstructive critisism because this was a nice poem.

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